A little help please

by Raleigh   March 6, 2013  

Attatched is an idea for a finished piece for one of my Pre-U Fine Art projects.

As part of the development, please may I get some feedback and perhaps an artistic response?

Anything is appreciated,

Thanks,

LL

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This is of course #11

Sir Velo

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posted by Raleigh [1728 posts]
6th March 2013 - 23:58

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Hi,like the artwork,not the comment!Been cycling 57yrs this year,trained and raced when family young,both now nearly 40 yrs old.Raced when a Coalface Chargeman at the local Pit,now retired i,ve learnt that while I love my 4 bikes and Tandem,cycling comes behind,Wife,Home,and personals,but I still get 100 miles per week.Looking forward to 2013 TT season.Good Luck,Foxyloxy Cool

posted by foxyloxy [52 posts]
7th March 2013 - 9:29

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I like the artwork.

The text needs work, I think. Change the font - maybe take inspiration from old TdF posters?
The line of text at the top is very unbalanced compared to the line at the bottom. That definitely needs addressing - and then take a look at your kerning.

posted by bashthebox [639 posts]
7th March 2013 - 10:36

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Awful. Start again.

posted by wakou [82 posts]
7th March 2013 - 10:56

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i'm not sure the artwork makes an easy impression on first glance (or even second or third). Is the banner saying 'CYCLE' or 'CYCLEO'. If its the former, you need to work on the rear wheel. Make the rear wheel and chain stay into the 'E' maybe..

posted by SPAM Naval [136 posts]
7th March 2013 - 11:28

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Yeah, I think the text is where it falls down.

My two sources of text are Velominati Rules, and Tweets off UK cyclists.

Keep it coming please.

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posted by Raleigh [1728 posts]
7th March 2013 - 12:23

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Here's another.

Critique welcome.

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posted by Raleigh [1728 posts]
7th March 2013 - 13:39

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Chainwheels,now theres a thing,I bet you are not old enough to remember the craze of having chainsets drilled to save weight!Foxyloxy Wink

posted by foxyloxy [52 posts]
7th March 2013 - 13:44

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I'd change the wording of the second artwork. It's a bit too long. whatabout "some days feel like they're for cyclists/cycling". do you need the word "just"? It's a pretty meaningless word! Just, just let me tell you, just because but just before that I'm just going to tell you that it just so happens that just...." etc. etc.

posted by Tom Amos [242 posts]
7th March 2013 - 13:57

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TBH I find all this "Look at me, I'm so hardcore" stuff a bit sad, as if people have something to prove.

Just ride yer bike Smile

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posted by Simon E [1946 posts]
7th March 2013 - 14:36

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I think the first 1 is pretty "bad, and not in a Michael Jackson way" - David Millar. Hate how the front wheel makes the C and the bike looks pretty awkward. If you made a drop bar you'd have an alternative C which I think would look better. The 2nd one is nicer but why shoot the chainring from the back?

Also the caption could read... "Sundays were made for cyclists; so get the f**k off the road, shouldn't you be in church anyway? Pr!ck!". Then you could have a hand giving the finger but glossed over in carbon fibre effect. Thinking

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posted by Squiggle [414 posts]
7th March 2013 - 19:37

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Nonono!

The whole point is that it's taken from Tweets!

The second one is Mark Cavendish.

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I was thinking of adding an 'O' to the saddle, but that may be a bit crap.

Hmm.

All worth considering.

Sir Velo

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posted by Raleigh [1728 posts]
7th March 2013 - 22:01

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